Amazing Esme.

Esme heard a sound.

We used a series of questions to up level this simple sentence.

What kind of sound?

When did it take place?

What did it sound like?

Where was it coming from?

How did it make her feel?

(short, effective sentence)

These are some of our amazing sentences - 

When it was Midday and Esme and her 3 cousins were gold mining, they heard a sniffing sound coming from the direction of the way they came. They started to giggle.
By Daisy - class Thistle

Esme heard a BOOM, it sounded like someone firing a canon from a tree. She felt sad.
By Nakachi - class Thistle

At Midnight, Esme heard a clanging sound that sounded like cups clanging together. She started laughing.
By Zuby - class Thistle

In the afternoon Esme heard a screeching sound coming from her wardrobe. It made her feel worried and scared.
By Tilly - class Bramble

In the middle of the creepy night.......Esme heard a sssssssssssssss sound coming from under her bed, after it sounded like a rattle. She felt horrified.
By Harrison - class Bramble

At 8 o'clock in the night Esme heard a screeching sound that sounded like a creature, coming from her room. She felt scared.

By Ajveer - class Bramble

Have a try at up levelling this simple sentence -

Esme saw the castle.

We would love to see your sentences.